兰溪第一中学 周巧玲 Tel: 83886819 How to Improve Our Writing.

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1 兰溪第一中学 周巧玲 Tel: 83886819 How to Improve Our Writing

2 兰溪第一中学 周巧玲 Tel: 83886819 How to Improve Our Writing

3 书面表达一：（改编自 06 年全国卷 III ） 假定你是李华, 北京人， 2008 年奥运会将在北京举 办, 现在正在招募志愿者, 你希望成为其中一员。 请按要求用英文给组委会写一封申请信. 内容应包 括 : 个人情况：年龄、性别、学历 个人条件：英语好、爱好体育、善于交往、乐于 助人、熟悉本地情况 承诺：提供最佳服务 注意： 1. 词数 100 左右，开头语已为你写好 2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯 生词：申请 –--- apply (v.), application (n.) ； 志愿者 –volunteer

4 书面表达一：（改编自 06 年全国卷 III ） 假定你是李华, 北京人， 2008 年奥运会将在北京举 办, 现在正在招募志愿者, 你希望成为其中一员。 请按要求用英文给组委会写一封申请信. 内容应包 括 : 个人情况：年龄、性别、学历 个人条件：英语好、爱好体育、善于交往、乐于 助人、熟悉本地情况 承诺：提供最佳服务 注意： 1. 词数 100 左右，开头语已为你写好 2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯 生词：申请 –--- apply (v.), application (n.) ； 志愿者 –volunteer

5 Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Li Hua. I would like to work as a volunteer for the 2008 Olympics. I’m a boy and I’m 18. I was born in Beijing. I’m a middle school student. I want to do something for the 2008 Olympics. First, I’m good at English. Second, I like sports. Third, I’m good at communicating with others. Fourth, I like helping others. Last, I’m familiar with Beijing. It is important for the work. If you give me the chance, I’ll try my best to offer the best service to others. Please accept my application. I won’t disappoint you! Looking forward to your replay. Yours faithfully, Li Hua

6 Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Li Hua. I would like to work as a volunteer for the 2008 Olympics. I’m a boy and I’m 18. I was born in Beijing. I’m a middle school student. I want to do something for the 2008 Olympics. First, I’m good at English. Second, I like sports. Third, I’m good at communicating with others. Fourth, I like helping others. Last, I’m familiar with Beijing. It is important for the work. If you give me the chance, I’ll try my best to offer the best service to others. Please accept my application. I won’t disappoint you! Looking forward to your replay. Yours faithfully, Li Hua

7 Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Li Hua. I would like to work as a volunteer for the 2008 Olympics. I’m a boy and I’m 18. I was born in Beijing. I’m a middle school student. I want to do something for the 2008 Olympics. First, I’m good at English. Second, I like sports. Third, I’m good at communicating with others. Fourth, I like helping others. Last, I’m familiar with Beijing. It is important for the work. If you give me the chance, I’ll try my best to offer the best service to others. Please accept my application. I won’t disappoint you! Looking forward to your replay. Yours faithfully, Li Hua

8 the same subject “ I ” simple words simple transitions （过渡词） simple sentences Problems & ways of improving them: Use different sentences ( 使用多样句型 ) Change the subject ( 改变主语 ) Use good transitions ( 使用过渡连接 ) Choose advanced phrases ( 选取高级词汇 )

9 Ⅰ. Change the subject ( 改变主语 ) ： 1. I’ll offer the best service to others. →________________________________ is my goal. (-ing 分词作主语 ) → It is my goal to______________________________. ( ( 用 it 形式主语 ) 2. I like helping others. →__________________________________________. (-ing 分词作主语等 ) →__________________________________________. ( 用 it 形式主语或宾语 ) Offering the best service to others offer the best service to others. Helping others is my favorite/ what I like most/…. It is my favorite to help others.

10 Ⅱ.Choose advanced phrases ( 选取高级词汇 ) be of great importance be ready to / be willing to … Word Phrase 1.I like helping others. 2. I like sports. 3. This is important for the work. be fond of/ be interested in / have great interest in…

11 Ⅱ.Choose advanced phrases ( 选取高级词汇 ) Simple phraseAdvanced phrase 1.I’m good at English. 2. I want to do something for the Olympics. 3. I’ll try my best to offer the best service. be fluent in/ have a good knowledge of/ have a gift for make a contribution to/ contribute to/ devote …to… spare no effort /make every effort …

12 III. Use transitions ( 使用过渡连接 ) 1. Phrases: ( 选取高级连接词 ) 表层次顺序，罗列增加： First,…second, …third,…fourth,…last… → __________________, __________________, __________________, _________________, _________________ → __________________, ___________________, __________________, __________________, ___________________ To begin/start withfurthermore in addition finally First and foremostbesides what’s more last but not least in addition to that moreover

13 III. Use transitions ( 使用过渡连接 ) 2. Sentences: （加上常见句型开头） I’m familiar with Beijing. → Another reason ______ _____ the fact that I’m familiar with Beijing. → The most __________ thing is that I’m familiar with Beijing. → There is no ________ that I’m familiar with Beijing because I was born in Beijing. → It’s _________to say that I’m familiar with Beijing because I was born in Beijing. lies in important doubt needless

14 Ⅳ. Use different sentences ( 使用多样句型） 1. I’m familiar with Beijing. It’s important for the work. I’m familiar with Beijing, ____________________ _______________________________. ( 定语从句 ) 2. I’m a boy and I’m 18. I was born in Beijing. I’m a middle school student. _________________________________________ ____________________________________. ( 定语从句 / 分词作状语 ) which is of great importance for the work Born in Beijing, I’m an 18-year-old boy, who is studying in a middle school (studying in a middle school)

15 Ⅳ. Use different sentences ( 使用多样句型） 3. I won’t disappoint you. （句首否定词倒装） 4. If you give me the chance, I’ll offer the best service to others. If ________ the chance, I’ll offer the best service to others. ( 使用省略） On no account ( 决不 ) _____________________. will I disappoint you given

16 ６. I’ll offer the best service to others. → It is _____________ that _________________. ( 使用强调句） 5. I like sports very much. I ________ like sports very much. ( 使用强调） do Ⅳ. Use different sentences ( 使用多样句型） the best serviceI’ll offer to others

17 国际文化交流中心将组织一次由各国学生参加的 “ 和 平、友谊 ” 夏令营活动，要求报名者提交英文个人简历。 假设你是王姗，请根据下列信息写一篇个人简历。 注意： 1 、词数不少于 60 。 2 、可根据内容要点适当增加 细节，以使行文连贯 书面表达二： ０６年北京卷 the Peace and Friendship Summer Camp photography

18 Steps of writing a good article Read the instructions carefully and decide the style. Follow typical patterns List the key points. Put the key points into sentences. （列提纲） （明审题） （选句型） （妙联句） ( 细复查 ) Develop the sentences into passage. Check your work.

19 书面表达二： ０６年北京卷 The outline of the passage （提纲）： Para1.: Introduce yourself Para2.: Reasons of joining the Peace and Friendship Summer Camp

20 One possible version （参考范文） My name is Wang Shan, and I’m a 16- year-old girl (who is) studying in Beijing Yangguang Middle School. I have varieties of interests. First of all, enjoying music is my favorite/ what I like most. In addition to that, I’m interested in photography because it allows me to record the beautiful moments in my life. Being good at communicating with others, I make many friends. What’s more, I’m always ready to help others.

21 One possible version （参考范文） I would like to join the Peace and Friendship Summer Camp for many reasons. The first reason lies in the fact that I I love life; I love nature; and I love peace. But the most important reason is that I think it a great opportunity to make friends with people from different countries and learn about their cultures.

22 1.Please perfect the composition after class. 2. Finish the third writing

23 Hope everyone of you can get a higher mark in writing!