高考英语网上阅卷对作文教学的反拨作用 江苏省句容高级中学 夏春来 2014.4.2

2013江苏卷书面表达（满分25分） 81.请根据你对以下两幅图的理解，以“Actions Speak Louder than Words”为题，用英语写一篇作文。 参考词：banner (横幅）stump (树桩） 你的作文应包括以下内容: 1.简要描述两幅图的内容；2.概述你对两幅图中不同做法的理解； 3.举例说明两幅图对你的启示。 注意：1.可参照图片适当发挥； 2.作文词数150左右； 3.作文中不得提及有关考生个人身份的任何信息,如校名、人名等。

As is shown in the first picture, a man is attempting to fix a banner on the trees, which says “HAPPY EARTH DAY”. However, what he can find are some stumps and a single tree. As a contrast, in the second picture, a man and a woman have just planted a tree and how happy they are. As far as I’m concerned, what the two pictures convey to us is such a phenomenon that some people prefer to speak for protecting the earth while some would rather take actions. Obviously, the latter one is more helpful to the protection of the earth. 1. 从句类 2. 连接词类

In my opinion, only by taking actions can we protect the environment effectively. For example, we ought to plant more trees and value the paper which is made from wood. What’s more, riding bikes or walking to school are both excellent ideas when compared with driving. Just as the saying goes, actions speak louder than words, it’s only actions that make sense. When it comes to our daily life, I believe there are a lot of things that count. If every one of us takes action, we may make a great difference to our society. 1. 连词类 2. 特殊句式 3. 从句类 4. 其他类

值得商榷的地方 As is shown in the first picture, a man is attempting to fix a banner on the trees, which says “HAPPY EARTH DAY”. However, what he can find are some stumps and a single tree. As a contrast, in the second picture, a man and a woman have just planted a tree and how happy they are. By contrast

What’s more, both riding bikes and walking to school are excellent ideas when compared with driving In my opinion, only by taking actions can we protect the environment effectively. For example, we ought to plant more trees and value the paper which is made from wood. What’s more, riding bikes or walking to school are both excellent ideas when compared with driving. Just as the saying goes, actions speak louder than words, it’s only actions that make sense. Just as the saying goes, actions speak louder than words. It’s only actions that make sense.

网上阅卷对英语作文教学的反拨作用 建立作文素材库，让作文训练系统化 开展多维评价，提高作文讲评效率 加强书写训练，做好“表面文章”