论证 VS 语言，谁主沉浮？ 主讲老师 尹小音. TR CC LR GRA TASK RESPONSE 扣题 COHERENCE&COHESION 连贯和紧凑 LEXICAL RESPONSE 词汇资源 GRAMMATICAL RANGE & ACCURACY 语法精准 雅思大作文四大评分标准.

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1 论证 VS 语言，谁主沉浮？ 主讲老师 尹小音

2 TR CC LR GRA TASK RESPONSE 扣题 COHERENCE&COHESION 连贯和紧凑 LEXICAL RESPONSE 词汇资源 GRAMMATICAL RANGE & ACCURACY 语法精准 雅思大作文四大评分标准

3 OFF-TOPIC UNDERLENGTH MEMORISED PENALTY ILLEGIBLE 偏题 字数不足 背诵 雅思大作文额外评分标准 罚分 字迹潦草

4 论证逻辑问题 “ 大起底 ”

5 It is indisputable that school should provide academic subjects for students. The instruction of academic subjects can ensure students a smooth career development. Take English for example, learning English can form the basis of future’s occupation. Speaking English is beneficial to boosting students’ language skills. Besides, students who can speak English fluently will communicate with foreigners easily, thus enlarging their social circles. Students cannot have chance to go abroad to get further education if they do not learn English well, which may make them have less opportunity to show personal talents and abilities. There will be a host of obstacles when you cooperate with foreign partners. It is indisputable that school should provide academic subjects for students 观点句 论据 The instruction of academic subjects can ensure students a smooth career development. 扩展 form the basis of future’s occupation Besides cooperate with foreign partners 题目：学术学科比音乐体育重要，是否同意？

6 The result of that academic subjects are essential cannot amount to that music and sports are good for nothing. Music and sports play an essential role in broadening children’s horizons, cultivating their characters and promoting the developing of positive personality traits. Take music for example, learning about singing songs can not only help students to cultivate their taste but also can relieve their pressure. So students can have conscious brain to focus on studying well. In addition to this, taking exercise such as running and playing tennis can make students have more energy to go on studying.

7 论证逻辑问题一：论据和扩展句中心思想不吻合

8 To begin with, children can have an excellent command of academic contents which is useful to their future career. In the second place, children learning academic subjects make them have the ability to apply their knowledge to practice. Finally, children who learn academic subjects have the possibility to get long-term development than children who do not learn academic subjects.

9 论证逻辑问题二：华而无实，假大空

10 Parents are important in shaping children’s perception of the world. It is clear that many children’s behaviour and ideas are affected by parents. If parents do not behave well, their behaviour can have a negative effect on children. This will affect children’s success in adulthood.

11 论证逻辑问题三：重复观点，无实质论证

12 一个 “ 合格论证段 ” 的三要素： 观点句 + 论据 + 扩展

13 一个 “ 合格论证段 ” 的 “ 思路七步曲 ” ： 第一步：摆出观点（全段的中心句） 第二步：给出支持观点的论据 第七步：回归段落中心，联系主题 第三步：解释论据合理的原因 第四步：举例说明 第五步：对比说明 第六步：阐述影响和结果 观点句 论据 扩展句

14 One major problem related to advertising is that it may mislead consumers. 广告弊大于利，是否同意？ 第一步：摆出观点，广告的主要问题之一是误导消费者

15 It is true that advertising exaggerates some products’ functions. 第二步：给出支持观点的论据 — 广告夸大产品功能

16 For example, advertisers attempt to emphasise the outcomes of using some skin products. 第三步：举例进一步说明论据 — 护肤产品

17 As a consequence, consumers may purchase these products, which may not be as effective as anticipated. This will cause a financial loss to consumers. 第四、第五步 : 阐述影响来加强论据 — 导致消费者损失

18 The parents who do not allow their children sufficient free time for leisure activities outside school hours are misguided. Such activities are far from being a waste of time for the children simply because they are not academic. 父母要求孩子除了学习之外，课外活动也都必须 和学习相关，同意还是不同意？ 第一步：摆出段落中心（这种看法是不对的）

19 It is important to remember that children need to develop skills other than intellectual ones and the best way to do this is through activities such as sports, games and playing with other kids. 第二步：给出支持观点的论据 — 孩子既需要学习 技能，也需要其它技能。

20 If they cannot play make-believe games, how can they develop their imagination? How can they learn physical co-ordination or learn important social lessons about winning and losing if they do not practice any sports? 第三、第四步：使用 “ 举例 + 比较 ” 进一步解释强 调本段主旨

21 Many children form strong, personal relationships with the friends they play with, and without the opportunity to do this, they could grow up emotionally immature or unformed. 第五步：总结上述论证，回归段落主旨

22 雅思大作文 “ 七大要点 ” ： 第一点：论证段 > 结尾段 > 开头段 第二点：开头段切忌冗长，抄写题目，使用模板 第七点：结尾段决不能虎头蛇尾，一定要 强化个人立场，总结论据 第三点：开头段要和主体段的论证思路吻合 第四点：论证中不要使用标新立异的论据 第五点：扩展论据 > 罗列论据 第六点： “ 半支持半反对 ” 双边论证 >“ 绝对 ” 单边论证

23 雅思写作 “ 备考四要点 ” ： 第一点：考前 30 天，一天一篇大小作文 第二点：修改逻辑和语法，找到自己常踩的 “ 雷区 ” 第三点：自我修改，积累词汇 http://dictionary.cambridge.org 第五点：多读，多积累

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