增强书面表达效果的技巧 2005年全国高考书面表达的评分标准： 第五档（很好）（21－25分）：

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1 增强书面表达效果的技巧 2005年全国高考书面表达的评分标准： 第五档（很好）（21－25分）：
覆盖所有主要内容；应用了较多的语法结构和词汇；语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑；达到了预期的写作目的。 　　这就是说，高考书面表达评分标准在语言的运用上对考生提出了更高的要求。即在考查考生语言准确性的基础上，进一步强调了用词的得体性、表达方式的多样性。同学们仅运用基础的词汇和基本的句型，不能体现出较强的语言运用能力，即使要点齐全，表达没有语法错误，但语言平淡，表达方式单一，逻辑性较差，也不能给人一种含金量高的审美享受，因此很难在考试的评分中得到较高档次。但如果有意识地使用复杂结构或较高级词汇，即使有些错误，也不扣分，仍属于最高档次。因此，要使一个平淡的文章变得丰富起来，从而提高书面表达的档次。我认为同学们应着力于以下三种增强书面表达效果的技巧。

2 增强书面表达效果的技巧 词汇反映你知识贮存量的多少，也是衡量英语水平的一个重要标志。 1. 使用较高级的词汇 技 巧
技 巧 1. 使用较高级的词汇 运用得当的句子结构可以给文章增色不少，从而使整篇文章因此而生辉 。 2. 使用较丰富的句式 　　对于学英语，同学们感到最头痛就是写书面表达。平时有些同学问到，考试时，写出的书面表达要点齐全，表达也正确，可就是不知道为什么打不上高分。是啊，为什么呢？今天，我们就这个问题，谈谈增强书面表达效果的技巧。首先来看2003年高考英语书面表达的评分标准： （第五档的内容） 使用恰当连接词，对写一篇有“英语味”的文章很重要，能使文章上下衔接自然、紧凑。 3. 使用恰当的连接词

3 一、怎样使用较高级的词汇 1. Because the weather was good, our journey was comfortable. 2.We all think he is a great man. 3.Suddenly I thought out a good idea. 4.The students there needn’t pay for their books. 5. As a result the plan was a failure. Thanks to the good weather, our journey was comfortable. We all think highly of him . A good idea occurred to me. / A good idea suddenly struck me. 　　词汇反映你知识贮存量的多少，也是衡量英语水平的一个重要标志。从评分标准可知，运用高级的词汇对提高书面表达的分数至关重要。大家先来看下面这些句子： Books are free for the students there. The plan turned out to be a failure.

4 6. When she heard he had died, she went pale with sorrow.
7. She went to Austria in order to study music. 8. When he spoke, he felt more and more excited. 9.In our school, there are twenty-six classrooms. 10.You can find my house easily. At the news of his death, she went pale with sorrow. She went to Austria for the purpose of studying music. The more he spoke, the more excited he felt. Our school is made up of twenty–six classrooms. You’ll have no trouble finding my house.

5 二、怎样使用较丰富的句式 1 When he arrives, please give me an .（使用V-ing形式）. 2. To his surprise, the little girl knows so many things.（使用名词性从句） 3. Though I’m weak, I’ll make the effort. (使用倒装句) 4. He did not know what had happened until he had read the news in the newspaper.(使用强调句型) 5. I passed the physics exam because of your help.(用虚拟语气） On his arriving, please give me an . What surprises him is that the little girl knows so many things. Weak as I am, I’ll make the effort. 　　在整篇文章中，避免只使用一两个句型，要灵活运用各种语法结构，运用得当的句子结构可以给文章增色不少，从而使整篇文章因此而生辉 。 It was not until he had read the news in the newspaper that he knew what had happened. I couldn’t have passed the physics exam but for your help.

6 6. She walked out of the lab and many students followed her. (使用过去分词)
7. They sang and laughed as they went back to school.( 使用V-ing形式) 8.I won’t believe what he says. （使用状语从句） 9.If you study hard, you will make rapid progress. （用并列句） 10．He had no sooner come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad. (使用倒装句) Followed by many students, she walked out of the lab. Singing and laughing, they went back to school. No matter what he says, I won’t believe. Study hard and you’ll make rapid progress. No sooner had he come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad.

7 逻辑角度 合适的过渡性词汇 时间顺序 first, second, then, finally/at last , soon immediately, suddenly 空间顺序 here, there, on one side…on the other side, in front of, at the back of, next to 对称顺序 for one thing, for the other thing, on one hand,on the other hand 转折顺序 but, however, while, though, otherwise 因果顺序 because, since, as, thanks to, as a result (of) 条件顺序 as long as, so long as, on condition that, if, unless 让步顺序 though, as, even if/though, whether, who 　 (what,when, where)ever 递进顺序 what’s more, besides, to make the matter worse,what’s worse 过渡性插入语 I think, I’m afraid, you know, As we all know 三、怎样使用恰当的连接词

8 What’s more, I can go to bed earlier. (NMET2001 范文)
三、怎样使用恰当的连接词 On one side of the road there is a new classroom building.On the other side,where the playground used to be now stands another new building—our library. (NMET1999 范文) As far as I know, everyone is happy about this new arrangement of things.(NMET2001 范文) What’s more, I can go to bed earlier. (NMET2001 范文) 　　有效采用不同的连接手段，用好各种连接词，对写出一篇有“英语味”的文章很重要，能使整篇文章有一定的流畅性，以使文章层次清晰，行文连贯。  　　这些连接词的恰当使用无疑能使全文过渡自然，令读者对后续的句子产生心理的期待和准备，增强句子间的逻辑性和紧凑性。

9 书面表达： 联合国教科文组织某考察团正在我国某乡村参观考察。假定你是接待人员,请根据下列提示以发言稿的形式简要介绍这个村的情况：   1)大小：近100户人家，约500口人。 2)变化：过去很穷，78年后变化很大。人们生活比以前好多了。现已旧貌换新颜。 3)教育：原来的学校很小，现已经过改建。新建的教学楼有4层，是村里最美的建筑物。村所有学龄儿童在此免费就读。 注意：1）要点齐全，前后连贯。 　　　　2）词数： 之间。 Ladies and gentlemen, Welcome to our school.This village is very small. It has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. It has changed a lot since People here are richer than before. Now it is taking on a new look. The school here was very small. Now it has been rebuilt. The newly built teaching building has 4 storeys . It is the most beautiful building in the village. All the school-age children can study here. They enjoy free education in it. Thank you.

10 it has changed a lot since 1978 ③ and has been developing very fast.
书面表达： Ladies and gentlemen, Welcome to our school! ① This village is very small. It has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. ② It has changed a lot since 1978 ③. People here ④ are richer than before. Now it is taking on a new look. Ladies and gentlemen, Welcome to our school ! ① This village is a small one with/which has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. ② However, it has changed a lot since 1978 ③ and has been developing very fast. 　　大家看，这篇书面表达要点齐全，表达正确，但语言平淡，表达方式单一，逻辑性差，它很难在考试的评分中得到较高档次。如果我们能使用一些恰当的连接词，尽量使用较高级、较复杂的语法结构，就使这个平淡的文章有很大改观，甚至会变得更精彩。 　①用介词短语作定语或用含定语从句的主从复合句。 　②语句间缺少连接成分。 　③表现作者对现在乡村的发展的喜悦心情，也起到承上启下作用。 　④较高级词汇。 People here ④ live a much better life than before . Now it is taking on a new look.

11 But now it has been rebuilt ⑦ and
In the past, the school here was very small ⑤. ⑥ Now it has been rebuilt. ⑦ The newly built teaching building has 4 storeys ⑧. It is the most beautiful building in the village. All the school-age children can study here. ⑨ They enjoy free education in it. ⑩ Thank you. In the past, the school here was very small ⑤ and most children couldn’t afford to go to school. ⑥ But now it has been rebuilt ⑦ and the newly built teaching building ⑧ which has 4 storeys is the most beautiful one in the village. All the school-age children can study here. ⑨ What’s more, they enjoy free education. ⑤作者对过去孩子们上不起学表示遗憾和同情。 ⑥语句间缺少连接成分。⑦语句间缺少连接成分。 ⑧用含定语从句的主从复合句。 ⑨应在此处添加一承接上下文的过渡性词语，如“What’s more/Also”，这样，前后就显得更加连贯了。⑩如能适当发挥，在结尾处添加像“…”的表希望、祝愿的语句，适当增加句子的感情色彩，增加一些人情味，会使全文更加完整，使文章读起来更亲切，完全达到与读者进行交流的目的，从而收到更佳的表达效果。 ⑩ May you enjoy your stay here / May you have a pleasant time here! Thank you.

12 Ladies and gentlemen, Welcome to our school ! ① This village is a small one with/which has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. ② However, it has changed a lot since 1978 ③ and has been developing very fast. ④ People here live a much better life than before . Now it is taking on a new look. In the past, the school here was very small ⑤ and most children couldn’t afford to go to school. ⑥ But now it has been rebuilt ⑦ and the newly built teaching building ⑧ which has 4 storeys is the most beautiful one in the village. All the school-age children can study here. ⑨ What’s more, they enjoy free education. ⑩ May you enjoy your stay here / May you have a pleasant time here! Thank you. 　　从以上我们可以看出，要使文章连贯、流畅，就要使用较高级词汇、复杂句子结构以及恰当的连接词，才能给人一种美的享受，才能在考试的评分中得到较高的档次。 　　总之，希望同学们通过以上启发，灵活运用，坚持用科学的方法多写多练，就一定能写出高质量的英语作文，在高考中取得成功。

13 A.在郊区，建造生活、商业、文教、卫生、娱乐休闲生活
(B) 请根据下列表格的内容，阐述一下你对减少城市人口的看法。 建议项 具体措施 目 的 1 A.晚婚 B.一对夫妇一个孩子 减少人口自然增长 （人口出生率） 2 严格控制外地人进城务工经商 减轻外地人口对城市的压力 3 A.在郊区，建造生活、商业、文教、卫生、娱乐休闲生活 小区 B. 在城市的县里建造卫星城 吸引城市居民到郊区和卫星城工作和生活。

14 Our modern city is too crowded, and to solve the problem, I have three suggestions. First of all, practise the policy of “ Late Marriage ”and “ One Couple, One child ” so as to reduce the birth rate. Secondly, the city government must have a tight control of people entering cities to engage in trade or do various physical jobs in order to reduce the pressure on the city caused by the increasing population. Finally, more and more people suggest that living blocks with shopping centers, school, hospital as well as cinemas and theatres or even satellite towns should be built in the city suburbs or the countries round the cities. In this way city citizens will be encouraged to move there. If these three suggestions are well carried out, the city population will be greatly reduced.

15 THANK YOU ! GOODBYE !