How to develop a paragraph on advice?

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1 How to develop a paragraph on advice?
Paragraph writing How to develop a paragraph on advice? 授课者：广州市第86中学 王如心

2 一、 针对如何治理交通堵塞，你有什么建议？
Version 1 一、 针对如何治理交通堵塞，你有什么建议？ （1）When it comes to the problems of traffic jams, I suggest that some effective measures should be taken. （2）To begin with, the government should try to improve the public transport system to make it more convenient for citizens. （3）In addition, people who drive private cars to work may share their cars with others when necessary.（4）Finally, as for us students, it is also proper that we should take public transportations or cycle to school.

3 二、 针对如何治理交通堵塞，你有什么建议？
Version 2 二、 针对如何治理交通堵塞，你有什么建议？ （1）When it comes to the problems of traffic jams and air pollution, I suggest that some effective measures should be taken. （2）To begin with, we citizens should improve the awareness of green-commuting.(绿色出行)（3）In addition, people are supposed to take public transportations more often instead of driving private cars. （4）Finally, people should be encouraged to ride bicycles because it is not only a reasonable way to reduce the traffic jams but an effective way to keep healthy.

4 Appreciate and analyze

5 一、 针对如何治理交通堵塞，你有什么建议？
Version 1 一、 针对如何治理交通堵塞，你有什么建议？ （1）When it comes to the problems of traffic jams, I suggest that some effective measures should be taken. （2）To begin with, the government should try to improve the public transport system to make it more convenient for citizens. （3）In addition, people who drive private cars to work may share their cars with others when necessary.（4）Finally, as for us students, it is also proper that we should take public transportations or cycle to school.

6 Logic 1 : the government people students
__________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ______________ the government _________ should try to improve … people _________ who drive private cars … students _________ should take public …

7 Logic 1 : Authorities People around Oneself ______________
__________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ______________ Authorities People around Oneself

8 二、 针对如何治理交通堵塞，你有什么建议？
Version 2 二、 针对如何治理交通堵塞，你有什么建议？ （1）When it comes to the problems of traffic jams and air pollution, I suggest that some effective measures should be taken. （2）To begin with, we citizens should improve the awareness of green-commuting.(绿色出行)（3）In addition, people are supposed to take public transportations more often instead of driving private cars. （4）Finally, people should be encouraged to ride bicycles because it is not only a reasonable way to reduce the traffic jams but an effective way to keep healthy.

9 Logic 2: Attitude (awareness) Action 1 Action 2

10 Two logical ways to develop paragraphs
“AAA” “APO” __________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ______________ Authorities Oneself People around Action 1 Action 2 Attitude (awareness)

11 你认为怎样才能更好地保护野生动物以免灭绝？
The possible ways to protect wildlife from disappearing can be suggested as follows. First of all, the government should pass laws to punish those who harm animals or trade animal fur or skin. Besides, people must stop hunting animals for their fur or skin. Last but not least, as a senior student, we’d better avoid any products that have been made from threatened or endangered animals.

12 To strengthen students’ health, ways are
你认为有什么方式可以帮助学生提高身体素质？ To strengthen students’ health, ways are varied as follows. It is necessary that the students should be well aware of the significance of health. As senior school students, what they need to do is to start out small, taking advantage of every chance to get some exercises, such as running, playing ball games and so on. It would be also a good idea not to have too much soft drinks and junk food. Only by adopting the above measures, can we improve the healthy quality.

13 【方法梳理】 Question1: What’s the structure of the two paragraphs above?
Paragraph1: ( ) ----（ ）---- ( ) ---- ( ) structure Paragraph3: ( ) ----（ ）---- ( ) ---- ( ) structure Question 2: How did the writer make the paragraphs more logical? D D D T D D C T By adding some proper discourse markers. .

14 3. When it comes to…I suggest that…on one hand…, on the other hand…
【文章归类】 “方法措施类”；“建议类”等文章通常可以用同样的方法拓写文章。这类要点中常含有“怎么办”“如何、怎么做（应对、处理、解决）”“采取什么措施”“对解决……,你有什么建议”等字眼。 【常用句式】 1. To solve the problem of…there are various ways. First of all…What’s more…Finally…Only by doing…,can we… 2. To do…,I would like to offer you some suggestions. For one thing…, For another… 3. When it comes to…I suggest that…on one hand…, on the other hand… 4. Some suggestions on…can be listed as follows. To begin with…Besides…Last but not least…Only by joint efforts can we…

15 高三学生如何释放过大压力？ （overwhelming stress）
【实战演练】 高三学生如何释放过大压力？ （overwhelming stress）

16 Do some sports/listen to music
Logic 1 : 高三学生如何释放过大压力？ Chat/consult Parents/teachers __________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ______________ Authorities Friends Classmates Discuss/share People around Oneself Do some sports/listen to music

17 enough sleep/balanced diet exercises/reading/movie
Logic 2: 高三学生如何释放过大压力？ positive attitude Attitude (awareness) enough sleep/balanced diet Action 1 Action 2 exercises/reading/movie

18 【作文评价】 项目 优秀 一般 建议 内容 主题明确 结构完整、清晰 拓展句能围绕主题展开，有层次感，饱满 语言 时态、语态正确
词汇、句子结构 衔接 过渡词使用恰当 书写 Clean & Clear(整洁、清晰)

19 Sum-up 1. What have you learnt today? 2. What’s the basic structure of organizing a paragraph? 3. How many logical ways can be applied to develop your paragraph?

20 【homework】 Task1: Polish your paragraph according to the writing standard. Task2: writing task. 对于如何解决“school violence”(校园暴力)事件，你有何建议？