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高考英语书面表达运用策略

Requirements of an essay ： 1. 在一定的语境中准确使用英 语语法和词汇。 2. 使用一定的句型、词汇，清 楚、连贯地使用英语表达自己 的意见。 3. 字数 150 。

Step1: Planning/outline ① Read carefully and organize your writing ② Find out which type it belongs to, narrative ( 记叙文 ), exposition ( 说明文 ) or argumentation ( 议论 ). ③ Consider which person should be used, the first person (I or we ), the second person (you) or the third person (he/she or they). ④ Decide what tense and voice ( 语态 ) should be used. Writing steps:

Step2:Drafting ( 打草稿 ) 1. List the words and expressions 1. List the words and expressions 2. Select appropriate ones and put them into sentences 2. Select appropriate ones and put them into sentences

Tips Step3:Check Spelling grammar Punctuations( 标点）

Standards of good grades Standards of good grades ： 4 。有效地使用了语句间的连接成份， 使全文结构紧凑。 1 。覆盖了所有内容要点。 2 。应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。 3 。语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为 尽量使用较复杂或较高级词汇所致；具备 较高的语言运用能力。

2007 年高考英语试题（江苏卷）书面表达 2007 年 4 月 29 日上午 10 点到 11 点，全国亿万学生阳光体育活动 在各地大中小学校同时举行。江苏省 1 ， 100 万学生积极参与 了这项活动。 教育部倡导学生： 每天锻炼一小时 健康工作五十年 幸福生活一辈子 请你根据以上提示，用英语准备一份发言稿，向同学们讲述一 下阳光体育活动的有关情况，并就高三学生是否需要每天花 一小时锻炼，谈谈你的看法及理由。 注意： 1 ． 发言稿应包括以上所有信息，要有适当发挥。 2 ． 词数： 120 左右。发言稿的开头和结尾已经写好，不计入总 词数。 3 ． 参考词汇：阳光体育活动 — a national student sports program; 教育部 — the Ministry of Education 。 仔细审读写作要 求和写作内容信 息，找出要点

4. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成份，使 全文结构紧凑。 Standards of good grades Standards of good grades ： 1. 覆盖了所有内容要点。 2. 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。 3. 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为 尽量使用较复杂或较高级词汇所致；具备 较高的语言运用能力。

语言错误扣分原则 书面表达一律根据实际情况使用时态。在内容要点的语言表 达中有 下列错误的视大错： 1.There is some problems. 2. I spend this summer holiday in the countryside. 3. I can also go to boat. 4.As a student, I like the summer vocation. 5. The air is pollution. 6.Trees green and birds singing. are spent boating vacation polluted ∧ are ∧ ⑴主语和谓语的数不一致. ⑵时态错误. ⑶习惯用法或搭配等错误. ⑷用词或拼写错误, 造成 意义变化, 影响交际. ⑸关键词词类用错. ⑹句子缺少主谓宾等必要 成分.

1. 绝招一：在用词上下功夫 高考书面表达在词汇方面得高分的评分要求是：应 用了较多的词汇；词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力 使用较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。 所以要想得高分应遵循以下２个原则 : １、高级词汇优先原则：这里的高级词汇是指比较 晚所学的，相对复杂的词汇。 2 、短语优先原则：考试写作时，使用短语， 有两个好处；其一：使文章增加亮点；其二可 以凑词数。 How to beautify your essay:

Examples ： 1 ）我很害怕。 I’m very afraid. I’m very frightened. I’m very scared. 2 ） 他很聪明。 He is very clever. He is very bright/ wise/smart/ intelligent/ cute. 3 ）她突然有个奇怪的想法。 Suddenly she had a strange idea. Suddenly she _______ ___ _____a strange idea. Suddenly a strange idea _________ ___her. Studdenly a strange idea ______ ___ her. occurred to came up with came to

1. I can’t bear it. Examples: 2. I want it. 3.English is very important in our daily life. I can not ____ ____ _____it I ___ _______ ______ ___ it English _____ ___ __________ ____ ___ our daily life. put up with am looking forward to plays an important part/role in

绝招二：在句子结构上做到脱颖而出。 高考书面表达在句子结构方面得高分的评分要求是： 应用了较多的语法结构，语法结构方面有些许错误， 但为尽力使用较复杂结构所致；具备较强的语言表 达能力。 1 、一二三原则。 2 、多变句式原则 How to beautify your essay:

1 、一二三原则。 为了使条理清楚，一般使用一些连接词 : for one thing, for another thing 1) 适用于两个要点的情况 : 2) 适用于四个要点的情况： to start with, next, in addition,finally on the one hand, on the other hand to begin with, then, furthermore, finally first/second/third/last firstly/secondly/thirdly/finally

Other useful transitional expressions: 1.meanwhile/at the same time 2. personally/in my opinion 3. first of all 4. However 5. moreover/What’s more/besides 6.on the contrary 7. therefore 8. as we all know 9. To make matters worse/what’s worse/worse still 10. generally speaking/in short/on the whole 11. in other words

1 ）改变句子结构, 与众不同。使用与别人不同的表达方 式, 特别是打破汉语句子结构的束缚而重组的句子更受 欢迎。 2 ）改变句子语序，实现句子形式多样化。 改变 “ 主、谓、宾、状 ” 语序，把一些成分如状语提前置 于句首，增强书面表达能力。 2 、多变句式原则 3 ）使用特殊句式。如强调句，感叹句，倒装句等增 强语句表现力。 4) 多使用短语结构简化从句或合并短句, 灵活运用介词 短语、非谓语动词、独立主格结构和同位语结构等。 5) 多使用主从复合句来代替简单句，使行文更富文采。

1 ）改变句子结构, 与众不同。 eg : ①唐山在二十世纪八十年代发生过一次大地震。 ②你八月一号的来信我今天早晨收到了. ______ _____a strong earthquake in Tangshan in the 1980s. A terrible earthquake __________Tangshan in the 1980s. I received your letter which was written on August 1st this morning. Your letter of August 1st ________________me this morning. A strong/big earthquake happened in Tangshan in the 1980s. There was hit/struck reached/got to

2 ）改变句子语序，实现句子形式多样化。 改变 “ 主、谓、宾、状 ” 语序，把一些成分如状语提 前置于句首，增强书面表达能力。 ___________________, he got up very early. eg: ① He got up very early to catch the bus. ② The girl, hungry and thirsty, went back home. _____________________, the girl went back home. To catch the bus Hungry and thirsty

3 ）使用特殊句式。如强调句，感叹句， 倒装句等增强语句表现力 。 It was ______________________that he _____________his composition. ①到上个礼拜他才完成他的作文。 He didn`t finish his composition until last week ②我们看到庄稼和蔬菜长势喜人很是高兴。 We were glad to see crops and vegetables growing well. _____________we were to see crops ad vegetables growing well ! not until last week finished How glad

4) 多使用短语结构简化从句或合并短句, 灵活运用介词 短语、非谓语动词、独立主格结构和同位语结构等。 ________________________,the young man couldn’t help crying. eg ： ① The young man couldn’t help crying when he heard the bad news. → ② Sun Shuwei is a boy of 14.He is a world champion in diving. → Sun Shuwei,___________________, is a world champion in diving. Hearing the bad news a boy aged 14

5) 多使用主从复合句来代替简单句，使行文更富 文采。 ① The flat is located in a building on Renmin Road. The road is not far from Yixing Middle School. → The flat is located in a building on Renmin Road, _____ _____not far from Yixing Middle School. which is

绝招三：准确地表达好自己的个人观点。 常用的句型： 1. In my opinion, … 2. Personally, I … 3. In short (= In brief), … 4. In conclusion, … 5.As far as I’m concerned, … 6. To conclude, it seems clear that …

2007 年高考英语试题书面表达 （江苏卷） 2007 年 4 月 29 日上午 10 点到 11 点，全国 亿万学生阳光体育活动在各地大中小学 校同时举行。江苏省 1 ， 100 万学生积 极参与了这项活动。 教育部倡导学生： 每天锻炼一小时 ; 健康工作五十年 ; 幸福生活一辈子 ; 请你根据以上提示， 用英语准备一份发言稿， 向同学们讲述一下阳光 体育活动的有关情况， 并就高三学生是否需要 每天花一小时锻炼， 谈谈你的看法及理由。 注意： 1 ． 发言稿应包括以上 所有信息，要有 适当发挥。 2 ． 词数： 120 左右。 发言稿的开头和结尾 已经写好，不计入总词数。 3 ． 参考词汇：阳光体 育活动 — a national student sports program; 教育部 — the Ministry of Education 。

07 年江苏卷书面表达范文 Good afternoon, everyone: On the morning of April 29, 2007, from 10:00 to 11:00, hundreds of millions of students from primary, middle schools and universities all over China joined in a national student sports program. Eleven million students in Jiangsu took an active part in this program.

07 年江苏卷书面表达范文 The Ministry of Education calls on students to exercise for an hour every day, in the hope that they will have good health to work fifty years and enjoy the whole life.

07 年江苏卷书面表达范文 Personally, I think it a good idea for us senior 3 students to have daily exercise. Although we take an hour a day for exercise, it is well worth it. Taking exercise helps us build up our body and keep a clear mind. Therefore, we can work more efficiently. Thank you!

Good afternoon, everyone: On the morning of April 29, 2007, from 10:00 to 11:00, hundreds of millions of students from primary, middle schools and universities all over China joined in a national student sports program. Eleven million students in Jiangsu t took an active part it this program. * hundreds of millions of * Join in * take an active part in How to beautify your essay:

The Ministry of Education calls on students to exercise for an hour every day, in the hope that they will have good health to work Fifty years and enjoy the whole life. * call on * in the hope that * enjoy the whole life How to beautify your essay:

Personally, I think it a good idea for us senior 3 students to have daily exercise. Although we take an hour a day for exercise, it is well worth it. Taking exercise helps us build up our body and keep a clear mind. Therefore, we can work more efficiently. Thank you! * Personally * a good idea for * Although * is well worth * therefore How to beautify your essay:

* hundreds of millions of * join in * take an active part * call on * in the hope that * enjoy the whole life * Personally * a good idea for * Although * is well worth 1. 多样的句型结构 2. 恰当的连接词 3. 丰富的词汇 * therefore How to beautify your essay:

Part 4 Part 3 Part 2 Part 年雅典奥运会 ( Athens) 使中国令世人瞩目，中国运动员创 造了新的奥运会金牌记录。获金牌的运动员除了得到政府奖 金 20 万元以外，还会从地方得到更多的奖励。对此，社会各 界反响不一。 赞 成 不 赞 成 1 ．运动员为国 争了光 2 ．运动员付出 了许多辛苦和汗 水 3 ．奖金有利于 中国体育后备力 量的培养 1 ．运动员是国家培 养出来的，为国争光 理所当然 2 ．得到大量奖金后 ，有些队员就会退役 3 ．一些公司趁机炒 作，从中获取广告效 应 请你就此现象进行简单阐述，并提出自己的一些看法或建议。 （ 150 词左右） 提示词汇：奖金 bonus Practice:

Keep in mind the following steps: Make an outline of the writing. Select appropriate words and sentence patterns. Make changes about the details and combine them. make a complete passage. Have a careful check to avoid mistakes.

Part 4 Part 3 Part 2 Part 年雅典奥运会 ( Athens) 使中国令世人瞩目，中国运动员创 造了新的奥运会金牌记录。获金牌的运动员除了得到政府奖 金 20 万元以外，还会从地方得到更多的奖励。对此，社会各 界反响不一。 赞 成 不 赞 成 1 ．运动员为国 争了光 2 ．运动员付出 了许多辛苦和汗 水 3 ．奖金有利于 中国体育后备力 量的培养 1 ．运动员是国家培 养出来的，为国争光 理所当然 2 ．得到大量奖金后 ，有些队员就会退役 3 ．一些公司趁机炒 作，从中获取广告效 应 请你就此现象进行简单阐述，并提出自己的一些看法或建议。 （ 150 词左右） 提示词汇：奖金 bonus

China drew more attention of the world in the 2004 Athens Olympic Games, in which the Chinese athletes set a new record by winning more gold medals than before. The winners of gold medals each received more rewards from local governments as well as a bonus of 200,000 yuan from the central government. Opinions are divided on the phenomenon. One possible version: Part 1:

China drew more attention of the world in the 2004 Athens Olympic Games, in which the Chinese athletes set a new record by winning more gold medals than before. The winners of gold medals each received more rewards from local governments as well as a bonus of 200,000 yuan from the central government. Opinions are divided on the phenomenon. One possible version: Part 1:

Part 2: Some are in favor of it. In their opinion, athletes have won great honour for the country and to win a gold medal, athletes have to make great efforts. What’s more, rewards will benefit the training of future players.

Part 2: Some are in favor of it. In their opinion, athletes have won great honour for the country and to win a gold medal, athletes have to make great efforts. What’s more, rewards will benefit the training of future players.

In contrast, others hold the opinion that athletes are trained by the country so they are supposed to win honor for China. Also some athletes will probably quit after getting much money. What’s worse, some companies will take advantage of the successful athletes to advertise for them, which will have a bad effect on their image. Part 3:

In contrast, others hold the opinion that athletes are trained by the country so they are supposed to win honor for China. Also some athletes will probably quit after getting much money. What’s worse, some companies will take advantage of the successful athletes to advertise for them, which will have a bad effect on their image. Part 3:

As far as I am concerned, it is necessary to do so since it can inspire athletes to do better in the next Olympics. Part 4:

As far as I am concerned, it is necessary to do so since it can inspire athletes to do better in the next Olympics. Part 4:

假设你是李华. 你将代表学校参加国际中学生论坛，就你所 在城市的教育状况发表演讲。请根据以下两幅图表, 介绍你市高 中学生构成情况及毕业去向的选择，并针对两幅图表中的数据 所反映的情况发表你自己的看法。 注意： 1 ．文章开头和结尾已经给出； 2 ．词数 150 左右 ( 不包括已给部分 ) 3. 参考词汇 : 图表 : chart 职业学校 : vocational school 外来务工人员 : non-local workers Homework Ladies and gentlemen, I'm Li Hua. Today, I'm greatly honored to speak here on behalf of my school. I'm going to talk about the high school education of my city.