初中英语九年级写作课 Unit14 Writing Faye Hu From Mashan Middle School

The beauty of the school The training time The first day Sports meeting Class meeting （班队课） Our teachers person/event Memories in junior high School

The beauty of the school The training time The first day Sports meeting Events &Your feelings

Ms. Xu

Describe my English teacher Ms Xu is my English teacher. She is an active teacher with long hair. I first met her in She helped…

Describe your English/science/… teacher 1.Who is the person? 2.When and where did you first met the person? 3.How did you feel when you met the person? 4.How did this person help you?

1. 审（ search ） 请你确定该文章的主题，确定体裁（记叙文，说明文 …) 、时态，划出要点 (key information) 初中阶段的学习和生活即将结束，你的老师们陪伴你度过了 三年的校园生活。根据提示，请你用英语介绍你最难忘的一 位老师。内容包含以下几点： 1. Describe your teacher 2. Explain how you feel about your teacher 3. Describe how your teacher has changed your life 体裁：记叙文 时态：一般现在时 / 一般过去时 注意 : （１）文章必须包括表中所有内容，可适当增加细节； （２）词数：８０ —— １００；

2. 列（ list ） 请根据文章要求用简单句子列出文章要点 (key information) 1. Describe your teacher （外貌，性格 … ） 2. Explain how you feel about your teacher 3. Describe how your teacher has changed your life Ms Xu is my English teacher. She is a tall woman with long hair. She treated us like friends rather than students. Once I failed a contest,I was upset. Ms Xu encouraged me and told me never gave up. I always remember her words—be confident. I first met her in She is kind and friendly to students. I remember that we students always liked her classes because her classes were relaxing and exciting. She never failed to give us valuable advice.

中考作文评分标准 第五档： 分 包含所有内容要点；完全完成了试题规定的任务；有清晰的 文本框架，较多的语法结构和词汇；有效地使用了语句间的连 接成分，使全文结构紧凑、行文连贯、表达清楚；语言基本无 误。 较多的语法结构和词汇；有效地使用了语句间的 连接成分，使全文结构紧凑、行文连贯、表达清楚； 第四档： 分 基本包含所有要点；遗漏少量次要点，较全面地完成了试题 规定的任务；有较清晰的文本框架，比较多样的语法结构和词 汇；行文基本连贯，表达基本清楚；语言有少量错误。

连接词 （ connection words ） 1. 表示顺序： first, second, third, first of all, then, next, finally, in the end, at last 4. 表示转折： though, although, but, however, 3. 表示因果 : so,because, as a result 2. 表示举例： as for, such as, like, for example 5. 表示并列： and, as well as, both… and, besides, not only.. but also, what’s more 6 表示结论 : as we know, in a word, all in all

t 3. 连（ connect ） Ms Xu is my English teacher. She is a tall woman with long hair. I first met her in She is kind and friendly to students. So I remember that we students always liked her classes because her classes were relaxing and exciting. And she never failed to give us valuable advice. What’ more, She treated us like friends rather than students. Once I failed a contest,I was upset. Ms Xu encouraged me and told me never gave up. I always remember her words—be confident. 方法一：妙用连接词

4. 加（ add ） 加首尾，注意首尾呼应。使结构完整。可以采取总分总的结构，开头要直 奔主题！ Ms Xu is my English teacher. She is a tall woman with long hair. I first met her in She is kind and friendly to students. So I remember that we students always liked her classes because her classes were relaxing and exciting. And she never failed to give us valuable advice. What’ more, She treated us like friends rather than students. Once I failed a contest,I was upset. Ms Xu encouraged me and told me never gave up. I always remember her words—be confident.. In my life I have met many people I’ll never forget. But perhaps the most unforgettable person is my English teacher, Ms Xu. I really like my English teacher.Because of her,I have made much progress. All the best to you! beginning body ending

I really like my English teacher.Because of her,I have made much progress. All the best to you! In my life I have met many people I’ll never forget. But perhaps the most unforgettable person is my English teacher, Ms Xu. Ms Xu is my English teacher. She is a tall woman with long hair. I first met her in She is kind and friendly to students. Besides, her classes were so relaxing and exciting that we students always liked her classes. And she never failed to give us valuable advice. What’ more, She treated us like friends rather than students. a tall woman who has long straight hair. knowledgeable 善用高级词汇 For example, she explains things clearly to the students in the classroom. 巧用例子. 活用多种句型 As the saying goes, “A teacher for a day is a father for a lifetime.” 巧用谚语 5. 美（ beautify) so that 句型.

Being a judge 我来做评委 在限定的２分 钟内，最先给 出分数的三位 同学中，谁的 最接近教师评 分？ 作文选篇（一）得分： ____ （二）得分： ____

学生作文（一） 教师评分 : ____ 12 １. 书写不够漂亮； ２. 有少量错误； ３. 缺少丰富的词汇和多 样化的语法结构； ４. 表达不够地道，较为 Chinglish 。

18 教师评分 : ____ 学生选篇（二）

技巧 1. 妙用连接词 4. 巧用谚语和例子 2. 善用高级词汇 3. 活用多种句型 summary Basic points ： １. 书写漂亮 ２. 无明显错误；

According to 3a, write an acticle about one person/event that you’ll never forget in your junior school. Homework