高三英语二轮复习观摩课 ——基础写作 第九中学 胡衍秀

1.文章的思想——要点全面 传递正能量 2.作文的卷面——字迹工整 书写漂亮 Tips For Writing

第五档(很好)；(21-25分) 完全完成了试题规定的任务。 1. 覆盖所有内容要点。 2. 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。 3. 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。 4. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。 完全达到了预期的写作目的。

第四档(好)：(16-20分) 完成了试题规定的任务。 1. 虽漏掉一、两个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。 2. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。 3. 语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。 4. 应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。 达到了预期的写作目的。

3.有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但 不影响理解。 4.应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。 基本达到了预期的写作目的。 第三档(适当)：(11-15分) 基本完成了试题规定的任务。 1.虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容。 2.应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。 3.有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但 不影响理解。 4.应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。 基本达到了预期的写作目的。

第二档(较差)：(6-10分) 未恰当完成试题规定的任务。 1.漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容。 2.语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。 3.有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解。 4.较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性。 信息未能清楚地传达给读者。

第一档(差)：(1-5分) 未完成试题规定的任务。 1.明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容，原因可能是未理解试题要求。 2.语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。 3.较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响对写作内容的理解。 4.缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯。 信息未能传达给读者。

不给分：（0分） 未能传达给读者任何信息：内容太少，无法评判；写的内容均与所要求内容无关或所写内容无法看清。

Writing Skills

3. 文章的语言——表达准确 词汇丰富 4. 行文的流畅—— 合理运用过渡词 正确使用高级句式 Tips For Writing

句 子 修 理 厂 ----写作常见错误

He said that she has made great progresses through her effort. had 时态、单复数问题 He said that she has made great progresses through her effort. had progress

词 的 误 用 We appreciate our apologies and goodwill, but we hope you can figure out a way fastly, because we lack of time. your fast

is What really inspires me that not only my family but also 句 子 成 分 短 缺 What really inspires me that not only my family but also my teachers care about me. is

The sun gives off heat and light, this makes it possible 句 子 结 构 错 误 The sun gives off heat and light, this makes it possible for the plants on the earth to grow. which

Being an honest man, Tom worked very hard. Tom never tells a lie. 逻 辑 不 严 谨 Being an honest man, Tom worked very hard. Tom never tells a lie.

强调“高级、复杂”两个概念 1、词组优先原则 2、地道原则 四个原则 3、避免重复原则 4、后、高、长原则— 后学到、较高级、较长词汇

［原文］A new railway is being built in my hometown. 词 组 优 先 原 则 under construction

努力 成功 进入大学 work hard try one’s best to do make every effort to do succeed 成功 make it 进入大学 go to the university be admitted into the university

be coming 即将到来 be approaching be around the corner 很有可能 it is possible that … chances are that …

［原文］Through traveling, I learned a lot of knowledge. 地 道 原 则 ［改进］Through traveling, I a lot of knowledge. gained／ obtained

原文：I like reading while my brother likes watching TV. 避免重复原则 原文：I like reading while my brother likes watching TV. 改进：I like reading while my brother watching TV. enjoys 后高长原则—后学到、较高级、较长词汇 very rather、extremely pay attention to attach importance to

Tips For Writing 4.行文的流畅—— 合理运用过渡词 正确使用高级句式

主语+谓语（vi.) 主语+谓语（vt.)+宾语 简单句 主语+系动词+表语 主语+谓语+间接宾语+直接宾语 主语+谓语+宾语+宾语补足语

并列句 并列连词： and, then, or, or else, so, for, while, when, both...and..., either...or..., neither...nor..., not only...but (also)..., as well as,...

宾语从句的练习 that the match had been cancelled. He told me the news . 宾语从句 宾 语 when he was leaving for Paris.

whose car had broken down. 主语从句及定语从句的练习 whose car had broken down. 主语 从句 主语 He helped the anxious man. 定 语 定语从句 What he did

状语从句的练习 Put the book on the desk. 状 语 状 语 从 句 where you found it.

Translate the Chinese into English with an elliptical sentence. 除非被邀请发言,你应该在会议上保持沉默. Unless ________to speak, you should keep silent at the meeting. invited

_______________many times, he still repeated the mistake. Complete the sentence with a non-predicate verb 尽管被告知许多遍,他仍然重复这个错误。 _______________many times, he still repeated the mistake. Having been told

☆You will have to work hard for years to speak good English. Sentence patterns are always useful ☆You will have to work hard for years to speak good English. ▪_______take you years of hard work ____speak good English. It will to

☆The dog jumped into the river and pulled the girl to the bank. Sentence patterns are always useful ☆The dog jumped into the river and pulled the girl to the bank. ▪____ was the dog _____ jumped into the river and pulled the girl to the bank. It that

▪______the Great Wall Hotel is the square. Sentence patterns are always useful ☆The square is near the Great Wall Hotel. ▪______the Great Wall Hotel is the square. Near

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1.感谢牵挂 2.学习状况和心理状态 3.老师和父母的关心 4.畅想未来 假如你是李华，你的美国朋友David了解到你即将参加高考，来信询问你的近况。请你给他写一封回信。内容如下： 1.感谢牵挂 2.学习状况和心理状态 3.老师和父母的关心 4.畅想未来 注意：词数不少于100，开头结尾已给出，不计入总词数。 Dear David, I am glad to receive your letter. _________ _______________________________________________________________________ _________________ How is everything with you？I am looking forward to your reply. Yours, Li Hua

I have the confidence to make it. Thank you for your concern. I am studying hard. Sometimes I feel stressed and upset. As you know, the college entrance examination is around the corner. about my present life. I am making every effort to study, through which I have made great progress. Although I can be occasionally stressed and upset, I have the confidence to make it.

My family and my teachers care about me very much. To be honest, what really inspires me is that not only my family but also my teachers care about me, which gives me the courage to break through myself again and again.

I love them. After going to my dream university, I will go abroad to study. My gratitude to them is beyond words. If I am admitted into my dream university, chances are that I will go abroad for my future study.

假如你是李华，请根据下面的提示， HOMEWORK 给王明写封回信。 提示： 1.告诉他其实英语写作并不难， 学会写句子很重要。 2.提几条建议，如：掌握基本句型， 灵活运用句式，增加过渡词等等。 3.鼓励他爱上英语，爱上写作。

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