English Writing
错误分析： 1. 句子结构错误： 1 ）主谓搭配不当 It with an area about m 2 There have hundreds of peform for visitor to view admire it. 2) 追求复杂的句式和长句，导致句子结构混乱。 It was a man-made mountain have some interesting projects. 3) 追求华丽的语句导致错误的出现 As you lying Sunshine Beach with sunlight stroke you body, you will feel comfortable.
2. 书写不规范： 句子开头小写； 用空心圈代替句号；字母四不 象；拼写错误 Some situation in films is not ture and it will make people a mistake.In my opinnion… 3. 中国式英语 The Happy Valley is a new generation of large theme park in Shenzhen. But I more like Sunshine Beach. 4. 审题不清
6. 乱用连词和从句 What more, it not waste their more time, moreover, the film is interesting. … the original work, the reason of whom is that … 7. 词不达意，逻辑混乱 It ’ s collection traveling the modernized club are a body. 8. 可以写出看似复杂的句子，但错误很多。
三. 书面表达的有效训练 １. 重视语言基础，避免出现低级错误 ２. 重视范文练习（背诵） ３. 重视知识积累和语言运用 作文 A. 27 分 无语法错误，字迹清楚漂亮，只有一处添加，开头结尾有新意 作文 B. 21 分 无语法错误，有涂改 作文 C. 18 分 几乎无错误，有涂改，字体乱 建议：文章段落一定要清晰 firstly … secondly … what ’ s more/ in addition Additional example: Para 1. They hold the opinion of watching films because … Others however argue that they prefer to read books because … As for me, I ’ m in favor of … Para 2. And the reasons of my view can be listed as follows. Para 3. From what has been discussed above, we can conclude …
高考英语书面表达评分标准 : 第五档. 25~30 分 第四档. 19~24 分 第三档. 13~18 分 第二档. 7~12 分 第一档. 0~6 分 第三档 ( 适当 ): (13-18 分 ) 基本完成了试题规定的任务. -- 虽漏掉一些内容, 但覆盖所有的主要内容. -- 应用的语法结构或词汇能满足任务的要求. -- 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误, 但不影响理解. -- 应用简单的语句间的连接成分, 使全文内容连贯整体而言, 基 本达到了预期的写作目的.
Tips for writing NMET English Writing
要点 要点 1. 涵盖所有内容要点和信息, 确定人称和时 态。 NMET English Writing
2. 词汇的应用要贴切, 使用多样的词汇, 避免重复使 用某一单词或短语. NMET English Writing 词汇 词汇
1. 多实少虚 : nice 2. 短语优先： I like it. This book is his. generous, humorous, interesting, smart, gentle, warm-hearted, hard-working I am fond of it. ３弃旧取新 : Ｗ e all have the same chance. possess opportunity This book belongs to him.
3. 应用的句子结构准确并能满足任务的要求, 不能逐词 翻译, 整篇文章中避免只使用一个句式. ( 尽量能运用倒 装句、省略句、强调句、主从复合句、分词状语等。 ) NMET English Writing 句子结构 句子结构
1. 为了取得更好的成绩，我们应该充分利用每一分钟。 _________get better results, we should _______________ every minute. Every minute should _________________________we can get better results. 2. 昨晚直到 10 点钟， Black 夫妇才请了一位医生。 The Blacks didn’t send for a doctor until 10 o’clock yesterday evening. In order tomake full use of be made full use of so that 强调句型 倒装句 主动语态 被动语态 It was not until 10 o ’ clock that the Blacks sent for a doctor yesterday evening. Not until 10 o ’ clock did the Blacks send for a doctor yesterday evening.
4. 学会使用过渡词，组织顺序，合并成文. NMET English Writing 过渡词 过渡词
Transitional words 过渡词语 ① 时间： now ， already ， before ， earlier ， so far ， before that ， afterwards ， since then ， soon, immediately, meanwhile, at the same time, suddenly, first/then/last, first/next/after that/later on/finally NMET English Writing
first of all / to begin with for example/instance first and most important first(ly), second(ly), third(ly) next, finally Transitional words 过渡词语 NMET English Writing ② 列举：
and then in the same way ， in addition and besides What’s more What’s worse, worse still moreover, furthermore Transitional words 过渡词语 NMET English Writing ③ 递进：
④ 转折： but ， however ， on the other hand, on the contrary, after all ⑤ 总结 : finally ， in short ， in brief ， on the whole ， generally speaking 强调 : indeed ， certainly ， surely ， above all 对比 : in the same way ， just as ， on one hand…on the other hand, similarly Transitional words 过渡词语 NMET English Writing
5. 表达能切题, 体现了活跃的思维, 清晰的 逻辑和真实的情感. NMET English Writing 开放性的结尾 开放性的结尾