浙江省名校协作体期初考试 英语书面表达 2016.2.27

概要写作 第五档（21-25）理解准确，涵盖全部要点。能准确使用相应的语法结构和词汇。有效的使用了语句间的连接成分，使所完成的概要结构紧凑。完全使用自己的语言。 第四档（16-20）理解准确，涵盖绝大部分要点。所使用语法结构和词汇可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。比较有效的使用了语句间的连接成分，使所完成的概要结构紧凑。有个别整句抄自原文。

Step 1：结构分析 P1: the preference of light skin to dark skin P2: the popularity of skin lightening products P3: the reason for the preference of light skin P4: the effect of the chemicals contained in skin lightening products on physical health P5: the effect of the chemicals contained in skin lightening products on skin color P6: the effect of the chemicals contained in skin lightening products on mental health

Step 2: 罗列要点 1. There is often greater acceptance of light skin than dark skin in many societies. 2. More and more people with dark skin are using skin-lightening products. 3. They believe that having whiter skin will improve their lives. 4. Some beauty care products contain chemicals that are extremely dangerous. Some has been linked to kidney damage and cancer. 5.Some even make skin darker. 6. Some people who change their skin color suffer emotional damage, feeling regret and sadness.

Step 3：理清逻辑 There is often greater acceptance of light skin than dark skin in many societies. As a result, more and more people with dark skin are using skin-lightening products, believing that having whiter skin will improve their lives. However, some beauty care products contain chemicals that are extremely dangerous. Some has been linked to kidney damage and cancer. Some even make skin darker. To make matters worse, some people who change their skin color suffer emotional damage, feeling regret and sadness.

Step 4: 同义转化&润色语言 Because of the society‘s preference for light skin, more and more people around the world are using bleaching products nowadays, believing they will benefit their lives. However, some chemicals contained in these products actually will bring negative effects on people's physical health. And long-term use will even darken the skin. Apart from the physical aspect of health problem, it will also lead to emotional problems.

Many people prefer light skin to dark skin believing that it helps improve their life and caters to the social standard of beauty. Therefore, skin-lightening products are gaining greater popularity across many areas of the world. However, bleaching products containing chemicals have long-lasting harmful effects on physical health. What’s worse, it may fail to achieve expected results and cause emotional damage.

应用文写作 了解couchsuring 审题： Couchsurfing.com，中文含义为“沙发客”，是一个旨在帮助旅行者于当地人建立联系的国际性非营利网站。通俗地说，当你旅行时你可以住在当地会员家；当有会员来你的城市时你可以接待他们住你家。 假设你是李华，你想成为该网站的会员，请用英语写一份申请，内容应包括： 1. 写信目的 2. 你的条件（住宿情况等） 3. 希望获准 不要透露具体信息 你的接待条件而不是你对别人的要求

写信目的 I have learned that Couchsurfing is a virtual community aimed at helping tourists find their accommodation and building up close relationship (association / bond) with locals. Interested in this non-profit international network, I am writing this letter to apply for its membership. Eager to join it , I am writing to apply to be a member of… Crazy about travelling and keen to be a couch surfer, I am writing in the hope of obtaining an opportunity to be your member.

你的条件（住宿情况等） basic equipment in your house /flat/apartment Bedrooms; washroom; living room; kitchen; hot water supply; free wifi; friendly family members extra conveniences supermarket a car convenient --convenience available Well-furnished ; comfortably decorated

I live in a well-furnished flat with three bedrooms with my parents , one of which is available for guests, a kitchen and two bathrooms included as well. Familiar with my city, I am enthusiastic to show the tourists around whenever I am available. My parents are friendly , especially my mother who is good at cooking and can provide delicious meals for them if necessary.

With three bedrooms available, my two-storey house can admit several “couch surfers”. Besides, I’m eager to befriend tourists of the same interests, enjoy their wonderful travelling stories and get immersed in diverse cultures.

希望获准 I would appreciate it if my application were accepted. I am thirsty for this opportunity and I'll appreciate it if I'm fortunate enough to become your member.