初中英语书面表达 木洞中学 殷天健 执教：殷天健

学习目标 1.了解写作的篇章技巧，使文章具有整体性。 2.掌握常用的连接词或句型，令作文更有灵气 3.通过学和练提高写作的技巧和自信。

computer games for long. We like listening to music. We play computer games for long. We study . Teenagers’ colorful life We often play Sports. We like reading books. Sometimes we travel. We go to KFC . Sometimes we stay up studying.

computer games for long. colorful healthy Teenagers’ healthy life We study all day. We like listening to music. We play computer games for long. We like reading books. We often play Sports. We go to KFC. Sometimes we travel. Sometimes we stay up studying.

写作第一步 审 认真审题，找出文章要表达的中心。

审 健康很重要。在学习和工作的压力日趋增大的今天，会休息的人才会有健康的身体。人们是如何度过假期的呢？国际健康组织对此作了一次调查，右图是他们此次的调查结果。根据你所得的信息，请为国际健康组织写一篇完整的调查报告,并提倡大家进行假日休闲。 travel stay at home visit friends or parents work

写作第二步 列 用简单的句子或短语列出文章要点。

根据以下关键词及图表用简单的句子列出文章的要点 如何度假 调查报告 倡议假日休闲 travel visit friends or parents stay at home work

列 列 A lot of people travel . Some people stay at home. Some other people visit friends or parents. A few people work. Enjoy your vacation.

a nice head a nice body a nice tail How do people spend their vacation? We made a survey and here is our survey report. a nice head a nice body A lot of people travel . Some people stay at home. Some other people visit friends or parents. A few people work. Come and enjoy your vacation. People who relax well work well. a nice tail

写作第三步 加首尾，使结构完整。 可以采取总分总结构或者总分结构，开头或结尾的句子应注意简洁，漂亮。 加

3 2 1 4 6 5 Second , we should keep quiet in the library. First , we have to wear our uniforms to go to school, though most of us don’t like them at all. Every school has its own rules for students. We have many school rules to follow in our daily life. What’s more, we ought to return books on time. Our school rules are good for us, I will try me best to follow them. Third , we must do lots of homework. 3 2 1 4 6 5

How do people spend their vacation How do people spend their vacation? We made a survey and here is our survey report. A lot of people travel . Some people stay at home. They watch TV or surf the internet. Some other people visit friends or parents. A few people work. Come and enjoy your vacation. The people who relax well work well.

写作第四步 连 恰当运用关联词句，使得文章层次清晰，各个部分衔接自然。

巧用连接词，赋予语言灵气 Which sentence is better? I played football on the playground. I fell down and hurt my legs. 2. When I was playing football on the playground, I fell down and hurt my legs. ( good) (better)

关联词 1.表示并列或递进: and, as well as, both…and, not only…but also, neither…nor; 2.表示选择: or, either…or; 3.表示转折: but, however, although, though, after all, 4.表示因果: because, so, therefore 5.表示条件: if , unless 6.表示对比: instead, not…but, on the one hand…on the other hand; 7.表示解释: for example, for instance, such as, that is to say, in other words; 8.表示顺序: to begin with, firstly, first (of all), second(ly), next, later, since then, from then on, finally, in the end; 9.表示强调: also, besides, what’s more, actually, in fact, 10.表示结论: all in all, altogether, in a word, generally speaking,

Let’s play the game. _____ I am tired, I keep on working till midnight. He didn’t go to movies, he went to the concert _____. We like doing kinds of sports _____ swimming, running and hiking. _____, he stood up. Then he got out. _____, he went back. _____, he smiled.

连 How do people spend their vacation? We made a survey and here is our survey report. According to it, most people travel. And some people stay at home. Also some other people visit friends or parents. However, a few people work. Come and enjoy your vacation. People who relax well work well.

We interviewed people about the ways to spend the vacation and here is our survey report. According to it, most people choose to travel to get away from the busy world during the holidays . Then some people like to stay at home, watching TV or surfing the Internet to have a good rest. And to visit friends or parents also makes them relaxed. However, a few people have to work. Come and enjoy your vacation. People who relax well work well.

写作第五步 美 选好词句，美化文章。在有把握的情况下展示自己的语言功底。

Skill One Make your sentences correct Good good study, day day up. We should do sports a week once. Save the environment is our duty. There is going to have a meeting today. I hope I can come true my dream. once a week Saving be achieve

Skill Two Express in different ways Our parents really wish us to work hard. Our parents really wish us to put our heart into study. The teenagers like the computers. The teenagers are fond of the computers. We shouldn’t eat junk food. We should stay away from the junk food. When he spoke, he got more excited. The more he spoke, the more excited he got. We should learn English grammar. It’s important to learn English grammar.

中考作文评分标准 第四档(12—15分）覆盖所有内容要点。准确使用丰富的词汇和语言结构。全文结构紧凑，有效地使用了语句间的连接成份，符合英语交际习惯；具备较强的语言运用能力。 第三档(8—11分）覆盖所有内容要点。恰当使用较丰富的词汇和语言结构。适当运用了语句间的连接成份，较好地达到了交际的目的。 第二档(4—7分）没能覆盖所有内容要点。词汇和语言结构不能完全满足写作任务的要求。文章不够连贯，影响对写作内容的理解。 第一档(0—3分）漏掉较多内容要点或写的内容与规定任务无关。词汇和语言结构错误较多。内容不连贯，无法传达有效信息。

作文 试题回放（2012年重庆市）  假如你校有几位来自美国的交换生，他们打算周末步行去翠湖公园。请根据提示为他们写出前往的路线，并简介公园情况。 要点提示： 1．路线(见右图)； 2．公园环境优美、凉爽，   还可游泳、野餐等； 3．…… 要求： 1．词数：80词左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数。 2．文中不能出现自己的姓名和所在学校的名称。 Cuihu Park is not far from here. It's easy to get there. Just go straight        

Passage One Cuihu Park is not far from here. It's easy to get there. Just go straight and return at the first corner. Walk along the road and turn left when you find a hospital. Cuihu Park is down the street on your right. Across from the park is a restaurant. The park is really a good place to have fun. It’s beautiful and cool with the trees and flowers. You can swim and play games or have a picnic there. It’s very relaxing. You may also get a good chance to practice Chinese. I hope you will enjoy yourselves.

Passage Two Cuihu Park is not far from here. It's easy to get there. Just go straight and turn right when you see a hotel. Walk along the road, and you can see a restaurant on you left, The Cuihu Park is on your right. The park is really a good place to visit. It’s very beautiful and cool. There are many flowers, trees, birds and so on. You can swim or have a picnic there. There air is fresh and have no noise. It’s really a good place to enjoy yourself!. from Jiang tianmin

Passage Three Cuihu Park is not far from here. It's easy to get there. Just go straight until you pass the hotel, then turn right and go along the road. When you see a hospital. You should turn left and continue going. You will find Cuihu Park is across from the restaurant. Just walk into the gate. The park is very beautiful. It attract many visitors to visit. Also, you’ll feel cool when you be able to get into the park. In the park, you can go swimming, but remember to be careful. And you will have a picnic with your friends. It’s such a good place to go. Finally, have a good trip. Just call me as long as you need help. From xiao tao

Passage Four Cuihu Park is very beautiful. It's not far here. Just go straight , get the gate , go along the turn right and across from hospital , you will see the gate , into the gate , you get to the cuihu park , There is more trees and flowers .The park have more fun , you can swim , play games , play sport , such as football , ping-pong ball and basketball . I hope you will enjoy yourselves . from zhang yao

Homework 在日常生活中你主动帮助你的父母做家务活吗？请你根据提示用英语写一篇80字左右的短文，描述你平时所做家务以及你对家务的看法。 提示： 1.扔垃圾； 2. 扫地； 3. 帮助妈妈做饭 4.洗衣服； 5. 为花浇水；6. 饭后洗碗 要求： 语句通畅，语法正确，不得逐句翻译。

参考范文 As we all know, it’s important to help parents do housework during our daily life. I often help them do housework. I throw the rubbish away and clean the floor in the morning. I help my mother cook lunch . After supper, I always wash dishes . I think it can make my parents feel more enjoyable after work. I always wash clothes for my family. Besides, watering the flowers is also my duty. I like them very much and take good care of them. In a word, the more housework I do, the happier my parents will be.（即总括又阐明看法）

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