1. 经历感受类 三水中学 郭春霞 ( ) 基础写作

Teaching aims( 教学目标 ): 1. 掌握经历感受类作文的写作顺序。 2. 学会使用一些与时间相关的副词或时间状语等 把要点合理连贯地连接在一起。 3. 学会运用非谓语动词、从句连接所给出的信息。 4. 掌握表达感受的常见句式。

March 8, Thursday Fine Today we paid a visit to a farm called Red Star. Early in the morning we gathered at the school gate and went there together by bus. After an hour’s bus ride, we arrived at the farm, where we were given a warm welcome. Soon after we got off the bus, the head of the farm showed us around. At noon we had a picnic lunch, after which we had great fun singing and dancing, telling jokes or stories. It was an unforgettable trip, because we not only learned more about crops and vegetables but also had a good time. 经历感受类基础写作的特点： 人称： 时态： 顺序： 常用高级句式： 第一人称 一般过去时（动词过去式） 按时间 / 活动开展的先后顺序 非谓语动词、从句

On Saturday, November 8th, 2008, I ______ (work) as a volunteer at Lee Apple Farm with John from England, Sinba from India, Keith from America and another 14 students. The farm ___ (be) about 60 kilometers to the northwest of our school. We _____(take) a bus at 8:00 am and ______(walk) for 15 minutes after getting off the bus an hour later. As a tornado ______(strike) the farm a few days ago, we _____(have) to pick up apples, telling good apples from bad ones and put them into baskets. Although (we were all very) tired after work, we _____(feel) it meaningful. worked is tookwalked struck had felt 技巧一：正确使用一般过去时。

1.We were about to set off ______( 这时 ) it began to rain. 2. _______ had he finished his speech ______ the audience started cheering. ( 一 …… 就 ……) 3.____________( 一到达 ), we began to work immediately. 4. _____( 首先 ) we saw a variety of marine life ________ ( 然后 ) watched the fantastic performance of dolphins. 5.________________________(…… 之后不久 ) we arrived, the head of the farm showed us around. 6. ______________________( 在春节期间 ), I attended a ten-day winter camp in Beijing University. 7._________________( 短暂的休息之后 ) we had great fun singing and dancing, telling jokes or stories. 8.Though I was a little bit nervous ______________ ( 刚开始时 ), _______( 后来 ) I felt relaxed. and the performance was a great success. when Hardly when Upon arrival and then Shortly after / Soon after During the spring festival 技巧二：巧用时间状语合理连接要点。 First After a short rest at the beginning later on

Examples: 1.At the end of the visit we listened to a lecture on protecting marine life. From the lecture we learn about the real situation of marine life. →At the end of the visit we listened to a lecture on protecting marine life, from which we learn about the real situation of marine life. 2. Early in the morning we gathered at the school gate and went there by bus. We talked and laughed all the way. → Early in the morning we gathered at the school gate and went there by bus, talking and laughing all the way. 3. Last month, our school organized a program. The program was called “Running for Olympics”. →Last month, our school organized a program called “Running for Olympics”. 技巧三：妙用非谓语动词、从句整合信息。

技巧三：妙用非谓语动词、从句整合信息。 1.We also visited a new sports stadium. The stadium is ten times bigger than that of our school. 2.Last Sunday, our class organized some volunteers’ activities. All of us took an active part in it. We also visited a new sports stadium, which is ten times bigger than that of our school. Last Sunday, our class organized some volunteers’ activities, in which all of us took an active part.

3. Group I went to the People’s Park. There they planted trees, watered flowers and cleaned the grasslands to make it more beautiful. 4. Group 2 made their greatest efforts to give the bus station a thorough cleaning. After the cleaning, the station took on a new look. Group I went to the People’s Park, where they planted trees, watered flowers and cleaned the grasslands to make it more beautiful. Group 2 made their greatest efforts to give the bus station a thorough cleaning, after which the station took on a new look. 技巧三：妙用非谓语动词、从句整合信息。

5. Early in the morning, we started to climb the mountain. We enjoyed the leaves and took photos at the same time. 6. We sat in a circle. We talked and laughed happily around the campfire. 技巧三：妙用非谓语动词、从句整合信息。 Early in the morning, we started to climb the mountain, enjoying the leaves and taking photos at the same time. We sat in a circle, talking and laughing happily around the campfire.

7.To beautify our environment, the Students’ Union organized a tree-planting activity on March 12th. The activity was called “Green Home”. 8. During last summer holidays, I took part in an activity. It was organized by my university. It provided me with a chance to go to the US. To beautify our environment, the Students’ Union organized a tree-planting activity called “Green Home” on March 12th. 技巧三：妙用非谓语动词、从句整合信息。 During last summer holidays I took part in an activity organized by my university, which provided me with a chance to go to the US.

翻译下列句子。 1 、我觉得，帮助那些急切渴望我们帮助和关心的小孩，是我 们应有的职责。 2 、我觉得这次活动很有意义，我学会了怎样与人沟通，并意 识到帮助他人的重要性和感受到其带来的乐趣。 技巧四：写感受常用句型 : 1) find sth. + adj. 2) feel / find / think + it + adj. / n. + to do sth 。 I feel it our responsibility to give a hand to those children who are greatly in need of help and care. I find the activity meaningful because I have learnt how to communicate with others, realized the importance of helping others and enjoyed the fun brought by my active participation.

Writing Task (2008 深圳一模 ) 假设世界艾滋病日那天，你和其他志愿者 参加了你校组织的 “ 关爱生命 携手 ‘ 艾滋 ’ 儿童 ’ ” 的活动。 [ 写作内容 ] 请你写一篇英文日记, 叙述活动情况, 内容包括： 时间： 2011 年 12 月 1 日 星期六 8:30 启程 集合地点：校门口 车程：一个半小时自行车车程 目的地：红十字会医院 活动内容：亲切交谈、牵手跳舞、赠送礼物、拍照留念、 共进午餐后返回 感受： …… [ 写作要求 ] 只能使用 5 个句子表达全部内容。 注意：日记的开头以写好。

一、认真审题。 人称： 时态： 写日记，用第一人称 叙述已发生的事情，用一般过去时。 Write Step By Step 二、信息重组。 句1句2句3句4句5句1句2句3句4句5 何时何地参加了何种活动 出发时间、集合地点和路程 活动 感受

三、词汇整理。 句 1 ：艾滋病日： 关爱生命 携手 ‘ 艾滋 ’ 儿童 ’ ： 句 2 ：志愿者： 集合： 句 3 ：红十字会医院： 同 …… 亲切交谈： 牵手跳舞： 句 4 ：赠送礼物： 拍照： the World Aids Day “Take care of our lives, hand in hand with Aids children” volunteer gather / meet the Red Cross Hospital have close chats with sb. dance together happily present gifts take photos Write Step By Step 四、连句成篇。

参考范文： December 1st, 2011 Saturday Fine Today is the World Aids Day, ____ our school organized an activity _______(call) “Take care of our lives, hand in hand with Aids children”. At 8:30 am, we volunteers gathered at the school gate and started our bike trip, _____ took us about one hour and a half. __________ we got to the Red Cross Hospital, ______ most Aids children are staying, we began to have close chats with them to see how their life is going, ________ we danced happily together. __________ (get) to know them so well, we presented our gifts, took lots of photos and ate lunch together _______ we came back. I feel very great _______(see) the Aids children so happy when they are not ignored and taken good care of. so called which Soon afterwhere and thenHaving got before to see

语言语言 7--8 具有较好的语言运用能力；语法和句子结构准确性较好， 词汇方面使用较好，只有少许错误。 5--6 具有较好的语言运用能力；语法和句子结构准确性较好， 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。 3--4 语言运用能力一般；语法和句子结构基本准确，语法结构 或词汇方面的错误不影响理解。 1--2 语言运用能力较差；语法和句子结构基本不够准确，语法 结构或词汇方面的错误较多，且影响了对句子意义的理解。 内容内容 5 包括了所有信息内容。 1-2 包括了小部分信息内容。 3-4 包括了基本信息内容。 0 没有包括所提供的信息内容。 连 贯连 贯 2 内容连贯，而且结构紧凑。 1.5 内容连贯性比较好，而且结构比较紧凑。 1 内容连贯性较差，而且结构不够紧凑。 0 内容缺乏连贯性，而且结构松散。 如何给你的作文打分：

A 、单词拼写 B 、时态一致（动词过去式） C 、语态 D 、冠词（ a, an, the ） E 、名词的单复数 F 、句子结构 如何改你的作文：

1.Write the whole passage in your exercise book. 2.Finish [ 能力提高 ]1. 作文填空 on Page 127.

I __________________________( 参加了 ) a fantastic English talent show in People’s park on Dec Middle school students from all over Guangzhou __________( 表演了 ) all kinds of programms, like English songs, English short plays and English stories. The purpose of this show ____( 是 ) to encourage students to introduce Guangzhou and the 2010 Asian Games in English and to arouse students’ interest in English as well. I _______________( 很兴奋 ) because I was the leading actor in an English short play at the show. Though I _________________________________ ( 刚开始时有点紧张 ), _______( 后来 ) I __________( 觉 得放松 ) and the performance was a great success. took part in / participated in performed was was very excited was a little bit nervous at the beginning later onfelt relaxed